OoO. thats lookin pretty cool! cant wait to see it done.

Suggestions... um... Well, this is more of a question.
Why are they wearing shirts? ;)

i think its lookin pretty cool so far. ill be interested to see whatcha do with it

Well, when you moved the nose up, you should have moved the mouth up, too. But really, there's nothing else wrong with the picture. Haha, I'm a little afraid to give out constructive criticism because I've been hated by many little kids in oekakis because they couldn't take it, even with a ton of praise added on to it.

The iris and pupil are pretty good, just make sure you don't make the eye looking like a football (very common eye mistake...).Try looking in the mirror and take a good look at the shape of the outside of your eye.It won't be an oval looking like a football.Actually, the part the eye is closest to your nose is pretty rounded as the line comes down from the top of your eye.Another thing to watch out for is how much white is above and below the iris, otherwise it will look like the person is scared.Anyways, I like the inner iris and pupil, good luck with the rest.

Umm....honestly^^;?I can't really tell any differences from the last revision (not trying to be mean but....><)....you know, you can't be afraid to change things more dramatically.like darkening up the skin tones so it doesn't blend so much into the whites of the eye.You might also want to add the eyelid unless this person is one of those people whose eye lid can't be seen.Another thing that always makes an eye look more relaxed is to pull the eyelid a bit over the iris.Otherwise you got the surprised look.I used to struggle on eyes before until I practiced over and over.Here's another trick when drawing an eye.People draw eyes with an outline(being the eye lashes) that goes all the way around the eye.You when you do this, you leave the center bottom (right below the iris) with the skin tone colors.It makes it look SOOOOO much more realistic.Add these ideas together and you can really make something out of it.Like I said, use a mirror.It WILL help.Hope to see some dramatic changes by the next revision^^.

P.S. For some reference on what to draw, you can use my drawing "The Eye of the Wretched" to get a feel for what I'm explaining other than the surprised look thing because I intensionally made the eye look surprised in that drawing...^^;

Vincent?

Suggestions??? Don't use PaintBS for starters ^^ The left is kinda outta alignment and the left curve of the face needs to be more smooth. A bit more curved inward.

As for the pic as a whole, I love Yuki!!!!

Hmmm... Reminds me of Sephiroth ^^ One thing, You should darken/clean up your lines a bit. Wait... *Is the master of scratchy lines)

Welcome to 2Draw Eiri-san! *loves Gravitation*