Very nice, lovely for your first attempt! Perhaps try and make the outline a little less visible? it helps to use the Soft Eraser with a low opacity, like 30 or something. That kinda fades it out, so it's still there, but not as much as it was before. But this is really great- I love it! Keep it up! ^_^
Ok well, I tried to fade the outline but it looked like crap so I think Im gonna keep it just the way it is. I also fixed some parts with the coloring as well. n_n
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