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Garnet
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Garnet (Jul 11, 2006)
Haven't drawn in a while and I plan on doing it seriously tomorrow, so I must warm-up! Jeez, feels like it's been ages...

Also, if you would, I need critique badly. I've never done perspective before, and I'd really like to get better at it. Thanks for the help! :D
Garnet (Jul 11, 2006)
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Garnet (Jul 11, 2006)
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Garnet (Jul 11, 2006)
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Garnet (Jul 12, 2006)
drawn in 1 hour 38 min
Garnet (Jul 12, 2006)
drawn in 21 min
Okay, so I'm saving a lot... But it's happened too many times that my computer has crashed in the middle of an oekaki, so XP.
Garnet (Jul 14, 2006)
drawn in 1 hour 15 min
Garnet (Jul 14, 2006)
drawn in 1 hour 16 min
Done!
Dromophobic_o.o (Jul 14, 2006)
That is so amazing. great job. =D
Garnet (Jul 14, 2006)
drawn in 2 min
hideyourface (Jul 14, 2006)
nice colours. but thats some messssed up anatomy.
Garnet (Jul 14, 2006)
No, no, no, I meant constructive! Elaborate, hideyourface.
Gigandas (Jul 14, 2006)
I think hide is probably pointing out her right leg, for the most part. The lower leg seems detached from the upper leg, since the upper leg can not bend backwards like that (at least not quite that drastically). I might pull it down a bit lower than where that left leg appears to be.
hideyourface (Jul 14, 2006)
well yeah, that and the flat looking body, the giant neck, and the large forearm. Where the legs are now make it seem as if the upper leg is much too short, and the lower is much too long.
Garnet (edited Jul 14, 2006)
Yes, with that I agree... both the legs are off in terms of what the human body is capable of... There's no way to bend them like that, or for them to be that high... OK, thanks a lot, Gigandas! I really appreciate it! n____n

Ah, the neck, I didn't even notice! T__T Thanks, though!
hideyourface (Jul 14, 2006)
well yeah, that and the flat looking body, the giant neck, and the large forearm. Where the legs are now make it seem as if the upper leg is much too short, and the lower is much too long.
Sweetcell (Jul 14, 2006)
But how do you suggest on changing it hide, that's what she's asking.

For me it's the arm. I assume it's pushed behind her? Though it would be smaller to show distance it's far too small. It needs beefing up. From the shoulder to her elbow to her wrist. It would taper as it gets farther back but the way it is now it seems too... sticklike. Especially in comparison to the rest of her body. Thicken it up a bit (including her hand,) and I think it'll be alright.

As for her legs both fore legs need to be lowered. As it is now the thighs would only be half as long then they normally would be. If we saw her knee it would be near the blue of the Description strip window. We'd only see a bit of her left leg. We would see the whole of her right leg. It needs to be shortened, only half the calf showing, in the perspective her right boot would look shorter than her right because of the angle.

And as for her chest, even flat chested there would be a suggestion of form by way of the shoulder, curving out to where the chest is, then of course curving to the stomache. (I hope that makes sense.) Best ref's to use I think are cliff jumpers or sky divers. They come closest to bending like this.

I hope you take it as suggestions. Overall it's a great composition and you'll know what to do on your next piece. In art it's an ever growing process of learning and bettering yourself.

Just don't change the colors. They're like a wonderful eye candy. *<>*
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