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keikai (May 12, 2006)

All somehow tied together by my main character, these three venture throughout the land in search of a certain friend. The standing one is Saieida (Sai) who is very shy, and wears a large green bow (though it looks more like a green blob). The sitting one is Akiska (Aki), he's very stubborn and will only swallow his pride if he is in the presence of those who could cause him trouble, he's a 'teen' and has raised his little sister even though he is young himself. The laying one is Kivka (Kiv), Aki's sister. She's rather hyper but also minds her manners since Saieida helped raise her, at the moment she's still a pup.

keikai (May 12, 2006)
drawn in 54 min

keikai (May 13, 2006)
drawn in 1 hour 49 min

Critique would rock (don't worry about sounding mean ;D as long as it's critique I'm fine with you yellin' your head off.) I took sweetcell's advice and focused the light on only one area and put shadows under them....the shadows didn't turn out like I wanted them to but oh well. It got sort of ick when I uploaded.

keikai (May 13, 2006)
drawn in 2 min

Fixed the sun! Guess there is nothing I can do to to de-ickify it. It's past my help now. Poor thing, it never had a chance.

Airin (May 13, 2006)

I think you could do well if you tried some different or more advanced lineart, I've got to contradict myself though, it's the simplicity of your art that really catches my eye.

Wild_Mustang_Girl312 (May 14, 2006)

I'm being a hipocrite.... dang... I love it, but, I think you should get away from the 2nd-grader-like sun. The up in the corner thing... kinda little-kiddish. I have no room to say anything, since, I have a sun simalar on my llama picture... oh well... I'll get to work on that....

Sweetcell (edited May 14, 2006)

Ok, Wild Mustang Girl, not to sound like a bitch but you need to advance a bit before you critique. Keikai has come a long way from when she started and has well improved, take your same advice mmkay?

Keikai your working well. Your line art is improving, and glad you took the advice about direct light. The shading came out fine. Akiska's right leg would be darker because his body would cast a shadow and so would Sai's. Some strips of grass under and over their paws would break up the feeling that their floating, which is what it looks like at the moment, and don't be afraid to work more on the clouds. Not so much blobs but fluffy cotton. As for the sun make it smaller and less bright and try to blend or wash out the yellow a bit so it isn't as harsh a contrast between the sky and sun.

Really are improving girlfriend. Well done. I like it, and the story.

keikai (Jun 16, 2006)

Thanks sweetcell. I'll try to keep improving with your help. In a way I'm gonna have to agree with Mustang Girl, the suns I make look sort of childish. Oh well, with the info you gave me I'm sure I'll figure out a way to make it better. I'll remember to use the grass idea for my future pictures since I've been doing grass a lot lately. Thanks so much for all your help!