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hideyourface (Mar 15, 2006)
drawn in 40 min

hideyourface (Mar 15, 2006)
drawn in 4 min

nekodesu (Mar 15, 2006)

Hmm...I think the lips could be a little wider. And that's the only thing I see.
This is coming along nicely :)

davincipoppalag (Mar 15, 2006)

This is looking good so far , conor. I like the painty style you're using

hideyourface (Mar 15, 2006)
drawn in 21 min

TaCO (Mar 15, 2006)

Maybe you should of spent more time blocking it in.
It's a little off in a few place.
Maybe if to fix up her profile the rest will fall in place.

DoOp (Mar 15, 2006)

omg you DREW =0 waii! :D looks pretty good so far =D

nobody (Mar 15, 2006)

seems like the detailing is lazy so far. i would suggest working on that. you can make it 'painty' and detailed too.

hideyourface (Mar 15, 2006)

arg. her eye on the right keeps moving down. thanks for the critique.

Gigandas (edited Mar 15, 2006)

You know, to be honest, I think you're scared of one of the biggest aspects to drawing 'loosely'. That would be, using strong contrasts. Nowhere do I see any dark darks, besides maybe the pupils here. You'll see that in the picture, the hair near the neck is quite a bit darker, her makeup around the eyes are darker, the line separating the upper and lower lip is darker, etc. You may also want to define her nose better too (including the nostrils). Couple proportion things worth mentioning would include, the space between the eyes; there isn't quite that much space, so I'd move them in a bit. The two points on the upper lip are also closer together, and the dip between them isn't quite that big (the very bottom of the bottom lip isn't quite that wide either). I'd also make the nose longer, seeing as it seems a bit short as is.

If you take anything at all from this critique, I'd suggest you work on contrasts really. Don't be afraid to use dark colors although they may seem quite intimidating until the piece is close to finished, and start to look good.

I'm sure I didn't catch on to every proportional problem, but we'll see how much this should help things first before we move on. Hope I wasn't being too harsh with my words either...just hoping this will help you out. Good luck with it.

hideyourface (Mar 15, 2006)

ehh, I know Im never good with contrast. I also find it a lot harder to get proportions right on the computer because I usually draw a thick line, then over it with the background colour to back it thinner, while with pencil I dont have to make the lines thinner and I can be more accurate. It just gets frustrating x_x

hideyourface (Mar 15, 2006)
drawn in 28 min

ARG

Gigandas (Mar 15, 2006)

Before you rework the details on the face, you probably want to make the head skinnier. Right now, it seems rather wide, and the reason behind that is that 'her' right cheek is too wide. Fixing that alone, could help a lot in making the portrait look like her. Best suggestion I could give you to fix that fairly quickly, is to copy and paste her face a tad bit over to the right, and tweak the off bits from the pasting, back into shape...

hideyourface (Mar 16, 2006)
drawn in 33 min

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hideyourface (Mar 16, 2006)
drawn in 25 min

GOOD ENOUGH

Gigandas (Mar 16, 2006)

Definitely made some improvements from the third version. Coulda gone even further, but I guess you're done huh?

hideyourface (Mar 16, 2006)

mhm thanks. but yes, now I never want to see her face again.

DoOp (Mar 16, 2006)

hahah hideyourface got fustrraited, but then...i do too,,,alot ^^; i think you did a good job :D i didn't like the picture a whole lot but your drawing was pretty good

Miss_DJ (Mar 16, 2006)

you're off to a great start! keep up the good work, bet you'll nail it.

davincipoppalag (Mar 16, 2006)

I think it finished up looking really good for the way you wanted to do it.