May be if you would read my comments and spend more time on, you would be better.
You know, just becuase you drew it doesn't mean you need to submit it.
the shading is way to dark compared to that white. but it is an okay drawing. besides the fact that malon dosent have huge eyes! lol. hate japanimation
It isn't too bad. I would recommend that you start out with a frame for the body it will help with the problems with the anatomy. As for the eyes you may want to space them out a bit more. Remember no matter how big the eyes are there is all ways a forehead. As for the shading try a light blue or a softer gray for the white. Shading the hair and the collar and giving a shadow on the background will help give the picture depth. Adding a detailed background can add to a picture as well. Knockoff is right you might want to take his advice and spend more time on stuff. Also putting your art down wont get you any place, think positive. I hope that helps.
drawn in 10 min
You know, just becuase you drew it doesn't mean you need to submit it.