It's a nice setup with how you've postioned the characters, but personally I think you have a more practice to do before you will have "mastered the basic skills of drawing" as this intermediate board description says. I'll give you a few pointers that may help, a lot of people do some of the things I'm seeing you do here- it looks like you've tried to draw the hands the way hands look, since you've added lines of fingers and such, but a common mistake is to make hands disproportionately small. Hands should really be almost as long as the distance from a person's chin to their hairline when the hand is held flat, and making a fist with them wouldn't make them as small as what you've drawn. Another thing is that some of the shading is smooth but some of it is rough and I don't think the two styles are really looking like the fit together here. The same goes for the lines, some are smooth but many are very rough. Try to be consistant with one style or another, and if you purposefully make them rough then you're going to have to do it in a way that it looks like you meant it to be like that, not just because you weren't able to make it smooth. A way that would make it look purposeful was if the picture had a mood or emotion in it that needed rough lines, like anxiety or panic.