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15grifficorntears (Feb 29, 2004)

oatmeal!
oatmeal!
so tender and sweet,
through my mouth to my feet.
give me oatmeal any day,
sugared, tosted it's ok!
i'll eat oatmeal in a train,
even out in the pouring rain!
i like oatmeal so should you!
it's better than sniffing glue.
oatmeal never getts old'
oops! gatta go it's getting cold!

15grifficorntears (Feb 29, 2004)
drawn in 14 min

Knockoff (Feb 29, 2004)

lol that poem is cool.
Its funny.
Nice job on the "oatmeal".

dixielandcutie (Feb 29, 2004)

LOL. cute. nice work ;p

marcello (Feb 29, 2004)

i like oatmeal so should you!
it's better than sniffing glue.

might work better as:
I like oatmeal, so you should too!
It's so much better than sniffing glue.

Deformed (Feb 29, 2004)

Hey marcello! I thought that you hated poems!

ToraNeko (edited Feb 29, 2004)

lol, Marcello, thats exactly what I thought when I read it! Althought I thought "Way" not "so much"

Wow its all steemy! Shoot, Now I'm hungry >.<
Edit: Darn typos!

marcello (Feb 29, 2004)

rikku: poems are all about b.s.
toraneko: that's weird though, syllable match works better in this case.

"even out in pouring rain" sounds better without the "the."

"oatmeal never gets old" sounds wrong as well...hmmm... maybe: "nice hot oatmeal never gets old; I gotta go, it's getting cold."

davincipoppalag (Feb 29, 2004)

poem aside.. I would like this better if it were sharpened up some.. I keep wanting to clean my reading glasses.. sharper..it would be a pretty good draw..

15grifficorntears (Feb 29, 2004)

hey give me some slack. I'm not the best poem writer, but the oatmeal does looks like it's from the point of view of an old man who's lost his glasses. 8)