Here is a story that I wrote like... a few minutes ago. I would appreciate it if some one would read it and tell me what they thought about it, I mean, you can be mean. Just... you know, constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated. I edited it where I thought it was necessary, and gave them names. I couldn't think of anything, so I gave them my mom's and her friend's names. It may seem like an outline, but its really something I wrote...