aw its kakashi! I want to poke him
me: *pokes him* ^_^
kakashi: ^_^
me: O.O....!
kakashi *pokes back*
me: *falls over*

This is wonderful. I like your version better than the original. The water is very nice and detailed.

Word. That's a brilliant picture, the hair looks almost as if I can touch it.

You're getting better, Tess!

some things along the pass will not be read or never..
tis only a tale and yet not a fable
mother crys as dagger flys
blood let top her table..
it was called by Lastrocrhsty, the ontt, the sent, 2nd of four, rivered by dieote drin, well sculpted and poor,
just one brother, another look up and be like him someday we hope, vamires roamed the tomb carved
apartment complex, we will eat you and not pay rent, bending the pupil to reach far in time,
bending like rubbermaid, who helped me find those uses, cant real-eyes cant, bumble autistic black and yellow jacket, feels like rain again, raing dow the throats, and ive slept not in five days, fine with no pillow slide feathered orange for all of the oranges they grown in flordia, wee tiny organs cutting cattle in a garbage van, being an insect a bee, or hornet nest i fed the cat, forcefully, i guess im just here and there, i guess im just contimplateing things, my steel store door, will wilt to a rose formed silowette,
NO SMOKING - NO CELL PHONES - NO @$$ CLOWNS - and ABSOLUTLEY NO! NEGATIVE!!!

None of it makes sense to me. From the sound of your "story" the picture should be more like someone imprisoned within themselves with no outlets. I am not sure I like this all that much. It looks too messy and undefined.

It's death coming to claim the soul. I don't know. I see a skull in the background. ?????

All those shades of gray. Cool picture, DireOnion.

Try adding more detail into the eyes. ^_^

I can spot several faults to this, although it is a pretty good attempt.
1.) Line tool and beizer zre no-nos.
2.) like marcello told me when I first drew a DBz picture, Try looking at a referance.
3.) Take your time while coloring!! I still see some white spots from just deciding to use fill on everything and not bother anymore.
Edit: This does not belong on the intermidiate board either. I suggest you take it off before it's deleted.
4.) Shading. If you use it, your pictures will never suck. Most of the time anyway.
overall, this is and O.K. DBZ pic, but take what I said and what other people say to make this much better.

The eternal question: If you 'know that it sucks' then why did you post it? There's always the unfinished hidden option.